Tuesday, July 17, 2007

Dead Line Chapter 11

2270 words

Alas, Harold is in love with Gillian but she isn't in love with him, though she recognises the relative safety of being with him. His treatment of Felicia is tempered by the fact the werewolf is Gillian's lover; besides, John the imp will dry the car out...

I try to run by the medium of every scene is there for a purpose. Since I often write by the seat of my pants, this often means that I have to have a reason, later in the story, for exactly why something happened. Sometimes I don't know at the time. This chapter, for example, shows:

(a) Harold so-very-human jealousy and spitefulness towards his partner's lover, despite their professional and familial relationship (note that he cooks Felicia's dinner)
(b) his warped sense of humour from association with a demon
(c) Julie siding with Harold against her sister because she depends on him
(d) Jasfoup's love of the arts and his cleverness.
(e) Jasfoup's easy friendship with Harold, and his sense of justice when it's him suffering
(f) Harold's unease with Gillian's diet
(g) His love for his mum
(h) Gillian and Felicia's heightened senses
(i) Gillian's genetic fear of mobs with torches (links her back to the cinematic tradition of vampires)

It also raises questions:
(1) Who wrote the crossword and how did they get it into the paper
(2) Where did the opera tickets come from? How convenient that the demon be missing.

and answers one:
(1) Harold stole the first victim's phone.

Only the omniscient view of the reader, and their knowledge of Vixen and her real name reveals the truth of the crossword- Having seen Mackenzie answer it, we know to read it 1 across, 1 down; 2 across, 2 down and so on. H&J don't know this.

I only wish I knew what Harold intends to do with the cream cake he put in his pocket in chapter 9.


liz fenwick said...

Time will clearly tell why they are important. I love how that happens :-)

leatherdykeuk said...

Thanks Liz. Most plot hooks are pre-plotted, but the cream cake baffles me.