Wednesday, July 04, 2007

Dead Line.

Should chapter two be this boring? It's 1700 words about Tom and his ailing mother, his desire for magic to return to the world (He doesn't know that it never went away) and his love for Ruby, though he mistreats her to stop her carping at him. He comes across as a little simple but cunning, which is good.

Maybe it'll liven up when I go back to it.

4 comments:

ChrisH said...

Rachel, thanks very much for celebrating with me, hope you get your chapter fixed (v frustrating when you know something's missing!)

leatherdykeuk said...

Thanks Chris; I hope I get as much interest with mine as you have with yours!

Zinnia Cyclamen said...

I think if it bores you, that's a sure-fire sign you need to make some changes. That's one of the rules of thumb I work by, anyway.

leatherdykeuk said...

I concur, Zinnia. The scene is right in that it sets up the characters. My problem is that it's very passive-voice.

I'll laeve it until I've done the first draft, I think.